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Timothy O. Goyette



The Sun was setting on the white cloven hills.  Long shadows stretched across the frozen lake.  The pink glare of sunset flashed on their blades as the mob cut and slashed among their adversaries.  The frost, which bit the air, marked hair white and their faces red.  These stark contrasts made them almost seem to belong in this frozen wilderness.  Savage, wild, and unforgiving.

As the struggle raged on shouts and screams filled the air, broke the mood of silent winter.  Steam rose off their bodies with the efforts to push past the defenders.  Jason standing half a head taller than the others took a second to survey the scene.  Soon the sun would be down and distinguishing friend from foe would be a challenge.  They needed to end this now.

Then he saw it, an opening.  He raced forward, slamming the only one in his way to the ground and called to his fellows.  A cheer rang out.  

He had broken through the ranks of defenders.  Now only one man lay between him and his goal.  He wound up and let loose with the most vicious stroke of his life.

The puck flew right between the goalie's pads.  A score, they won 5 to 4.  Just in time too.  Jason's mother was calling him in for dinner.


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2009-03-28 15:01:03
Cool story :) it had me totally. I was imagining hardened warriors, desperately fighting for their lives in some fantastic battle scene. All I would do is change 'broke the mood of silent winter.' to 'breaking the mood of silent winter.' Not that your sentence doesn't work or anything, it does, and quite well. I just like mine better :) Again, good story, I read it twice, thanks.

2009-03-02 22:15:22
I like the story. "Just in time too." is a sentence fragment, as is, "Savage, wild, and unforgiving." "The puck flew right between the goalies pads." {should be: goalie's pads.} "...almost seem to belong ..." The story is too short to develope such minutia. The fact of the matter is that the hockey players DO belong, if only for the moment. The alliteration "...took a second to survey the scene. Soon the sun..." works well. S4

2009-03-02 10:25:56
Cute. As a hockey fan, I liked it.




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