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Voyage of the Crimson Lady
In the cavernous interior of the ships main docking bay, three coffin like tanks came to life. Inside each, the senior officers of The Crimson Lady were resuscitated. The tank lids retracted and a thin mist spilled to the floor, swirling among the thousand other sarcophagi that littered the hanger. In each was a member of the 1st/110th 28th Infantry Division (m).
They got the job done.
This type of story has been done to death. Portraying the military as a warmongering, destruction-loving group is offensive and incorrect. Believe it or not, most members of the military are the first to shout for joy when peace occurs. Unless the author can present some plausible reason why this wouldn't be the case (which the synopsis doesn't), this story is stereotype in the worst form. There's no depth or complexity even hinted at in this synopsis. If this were the blurb for the story, I know of few readers who would bother with the rest of it.
Reads as a bunch of thawed-out warmongers attempting to prolong a war. Hopefully the author remedies this by the end of story. DMD
... oops, that should be "introduce a little more tension"
As a synopsis, this needs work, a lot of it. The soldiers coming out of cryo-sleep is way too "Aliens". Scrap the ending, it's too predictable, and try for something really original. Introduce a little more tendion between the three awakened characters and see how it flys. No pun intended.
Yes Michel, that attitude seems to be an all pervasive constant in our society. Thanks.
Hello yawn. I cannot be offended as your pedestrian tastes are beneath me.
I did mention it at the end, they "failed" to hear it in time.
I liked the twisted ending. But why had the colony not tried to contact or intersept the orbiting ship.
Hehehe. A parallel to our own society maybe? I've experienced that (not the h-bomb, but the self-destructive habit). Cheers, Michel Racine.
Yawn. Not my kind of story. I like a plot and characters I can relate too.
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